the maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 years period from 1980 to 2005.

the maps show changes that took place in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 years period from 1980 to 2005.
The two maps illustrate the changes that happened in a city in New Zealand over a span of 25 years between 1980 and 2005.
Overall
, the city has transformed completely into an industrial area.
It is clear that
the vast majority of the recreational areas have been replaced by factories. As can be seen from the maps, the train railway passed the river and was expanded towards the north.
Additionally
, to the east of it, a marina was constructed by the year 2005. To the northwest side of the railway,
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, the houses were demolished, and a stadium, accompanied by a parking place was built.
Moreover
, a couple of skyscrapers were developed, as the trees along the railway, were uprooted.
Furthermore
, on the left side of the map, in the middle part, the private houses were removed to make
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way for the construction of the factories. In the southwest part of the map, across the skyscrapers, a warehouse was set up.
Although
the city has undergone lots of changes throughout
this
period, some places like the school and the airport remained untouched.
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