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You have been doing some voluntary work to help your local community. However, now you are unable to continue doing this work. Write a letter to the manager of the organisation where you have been working. In your letter -Describe the work you have been doing -Explain why you can no longer do this work -Recommend another person who is interested in the work

#work #community #manager #organisation #-describe #-explain #-recommend #person
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Dear I am writing a letter to you
give
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to give
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 information, yesterday I got an offer of
job
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a job
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another
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from another
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 company and
Iam
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I am
 sending
letter
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a letter
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 to give me
permisson
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permission
 to out of here.
Two
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 days, I have to do for charity and give my
time
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 to ask another
society
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 in my hometown and ask
money
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for money
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 from the
society
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 and ask
whatever
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for whatever
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their
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they
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 have. I am out of here because want to work
for got
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 a lot of money and make my family
be
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happy. As we know
the
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apply
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charity can not give income and spend my
time
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 just
for
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to
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 help another
society
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 who
needs
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. I can't
to
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stay
of
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here
because
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for a long
time
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 because need income to
get
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buy food and basic needs.
The
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Society
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society
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 must attention
with
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to
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they
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their
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life
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lives
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 to get
salary
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a salary
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 and
can
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buy all
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the family
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family
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 needs I have a friend to change my position
in
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here. Its name
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is awan
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awan
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Awan
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. Maybe he
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wants
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 to work for
long
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a long
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time
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. In conclusion,
The
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apply
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society
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 must give
many
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 attention
for
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to
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the family
a family
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family
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families
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 because they can not
to
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apply
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survive
for
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in
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future
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the future
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 without a job and
get
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getting
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 payroll.
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suitable writing tone
Use more formal and polite language, especially since you are addressing a manager. This can make your letter more professional and respectful.
logical structure
Make sure your sentences and ideas flow smoothly by using connecting words and phrases. This helps the reader follow your message clearly.
complete response
You have covered all the necessary points: describing your work, explaining why you can no longer do it, and recommending another person.
greeting and closing
You ended the letter with a conclusion, summarizing your main point which is good for closure.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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