Nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before. In order to become integrated into society in their adopted countries, immigrants should abandon their old ways and adapt to local custom and codes of behavior. Do you agree or disagree ?
It is undeniable that these days many people are seeking
their
better quality of Change the word
a
lives
, so they migrate to other countries. In Fix the agreement mistake
life
this
regard, many think that to assimilate in
the new Change preposition
into
society
, immigrants should forget their traditional cultures and customs, and they should attempt to be familiar with new local cultures. From my perspective, it is not absolutely necessary to abandon their ingrained culture
, however
, familiarisation with culture
in new
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a new
society
can be advantageous for their migration.
To begin
with, culture
and tradition plays
a vital role Correct subject-verb agreement
play
for
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in
nation's
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a nation's
identities
, which should be preserved and passed down to our younger generation. Fix the agreement mistake
identity
This
is a
inherent responsibility of every citizen. If we Change the article
an
are fail
to Change the verb form
fail
substain
, no one will do so. Correct your spelling
sustain
As a result
, our nation, race and language will not vanish in the long run. Hence
, no matter where we are, we should not forget our traditional custom
. Fix the agreement mistake
customs
For example
, parent
should put efforts Fix the agreement mistake
parents
to teach
their mother tongue to their children, thereby they will appreciate and value their own race and nation.
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into teaching
On the other hand
, people tend to migrate for either their
better job opportunities Correct pronoun usage
apply
and
their studies. Correct word choice
or
Indiviually
, cultural diversity and racial prejudice are common challenges which most Correct your spelling
Individually
imigrants
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immigrants
are facing
, when they relocate to other countries. To accustom with Wrong verb form
face
new
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a new
society
, they should adopt the positive aspects of the different culture
. For example
, in some nations, consumption of beef is prohibited. As a migrant, this
kind of their
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apply
culture
should be avoided and be respectful. Consequently
, their life living in foreign countries becomes more ease
.
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easy
To sum up
, it can be reiterated, that although
people migrate to find better opportunities, they should not abondon
their original traditions and customs. Adaptation should not Correct your spelling
abandon
forget
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be forgotten
new
Add an article
the new
a new
society
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