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Band 3.5

Some people prefer to live in house, while others fee that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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To fulfill residence needs, there are popular
discussion
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discussions
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 about living in a landed
house
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 or living on
high-rise
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a high-rise
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 building. I agree that living in a landed
house
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 would provide more advantages than living
on
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in
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high-rise
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a high-rise
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 building for several reasons. First of all, living in a landed
house
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 could offer more comfortable aspects,
such
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 as ownership and privacy. A landed
house
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 could be owned without
time
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a time
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 limit
until
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apply
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while
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 apartments have
certain
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a certain
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 period to be lived
due to
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 the usage period of the building.
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, living in a landed
house
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 could provide more privacy
space
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 because it fully separated
area
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the area
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 from the
neighbors
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neighbours
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. Meanwhile,
on
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in
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high-rise
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a high-rise
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 building people would live in
same
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the same
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 area side by side
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, a landed
house
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 could be modified following the
owners
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owner's
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 wants
whereas
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 people who lived in
apartment
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apartments
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 have restrictions to modify their
space
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. The
home owner
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homeowner
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 could customize their property
such
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 as
build
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building
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 up a garden, swimming pool or basement on their properties. On
other
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the other
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 hand, people who
lived
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live
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 in apartments have restrictions to modify their
space
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due to
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 the construction safety. In conclusion, living
on
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in
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 a landed
house
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 could be more comfortable than living
on
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in
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apartments
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an apartments
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, especially
for
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because of
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 the ownership aspects, high privacy
space
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 and possibility
to
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of
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modify
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modification
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.
However
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, a landed
house
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 could have
higher
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a higher
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 cost to be owned rather than
apartment
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an apartment
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, especially
on
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in
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metropolitan
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a metropolitan
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 city
due to
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 the limited supply.

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task achievement
Your essay addresses the task prompt well by comparing the advantages and disadvantages of living in a house versus an apartment. However, to improve, you could consider adding more specific examples and addressing a counter-argument to strengthen your position.
coherence cohesion
While your paragraphs are logically organized, you could work on your transitions to further enhance the flow between ideas. For instance, using words like 'Conversely' or 'On the other hand' can help guide the reader more smoothly from one point to another.
coherence cohesion
Consider expanding the conclusion to provide a more balanced view, briefly mentioning any disadvantages of living in a house to provide a more comprehensive discussion.
task achievement
You have a clear thesis statement in the introduction which outlines your position on the topic.
coherence cohesion
Your main points are clearly presented and paragraphs are well-structured around these points.
task achievement
Your language is generally clear and you use a good range of vocabulary to express your ideas.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Privacy
  • Living space
  • Gardening
  • Yard
  • Customization
  • Renovate
  • Building regulations
  • Ownership
  • Noise levels
  • Detached properties
  • Investment value
  • Appreciate
  • Long-term investment
  • Community
  • Social interaction
  • Shared facilities
  • Proximity
  • Neighbors
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