Your local council has decided to close the only park in your town and build a car park in its place. You believe this will have a bad effect on the people who live and work in the town. Write a letter to the mayor. In your letter introduce yourself explain why you think the decision is wrong say what you think the council should do instead

Dear Mr Kim, I am a resident who
have
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lived in Topayoh since I was born. I found my neighbourhood quite convenient and
tranquail
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tranquil
throughout the time I live here. I heard that you have decided to
develope
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develop
our town by building a
carpark
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car park
in the existing public
park
.
Therefore
, I am writing
this
letter to request you,
reconsidering
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your decision as it is
only
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the only
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public space in the vicinity of our town. Based on my experience,
majority
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of residents rely on
this
public
park
whenever they
want
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do physical exercises and
do
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the
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social gatherings.
In addition
,
playground
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the playground
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in the
park
has been a favourite spot for children, which is usually crowded with them, especially on their holidays. If
this
essential
park
for many
resident
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is demolished , they could not find the other places.
Hence
, I would like to suggest an alternative solution, renovating the existing carpark to the multi-storeyed carpark.
As a result
, the
park
will be affected. I hope that you can understand my
explaination
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explanation
, and my suggestion will be helpful for your future decision. Best Regards, Aye
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task achievement
In your second paragraph, try to add more specific examples or statistics to strengthen your argument for why the park is essential for residents.
coherence cohesion
Avoid minor grammatical errors. For instance, 'residents who have lived' should be 'resident who has lived'.
task achievement
It would be good to propose more than one alternative solution to the plan, to provide the council with multiple options to consider.
suitable writing tone
Your greeting and closing are appropriate and polite, setting a formal tone which is suitable for a letter to the mayor.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph contains a single idea, making your points clear and understandable.

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