Your local council has decided to close the only park in your town and build a car park in its place. You believe this will have a bad effect on the people who live and work in the town. Write a letter to the mayor. In your letter introduce yourself explain why you think the decision is wrong say what you think the council should do instead
Dear Mr Kim,
I am a resident who
have
lived in Topayoh since I was born. I found my neighbourhood quite convenient and Change the verb form
has
tranquail
throughout the time I live here. I heard that you have decided to Correct your spelling
tranquil
develope
our town by building a Correct your spelling
develop
carpark
in the existing public Correct your spelling
car park
park
. Therefore
, I am writing this
letter to request you, reconsidering
your decision as it is Change the verb form
to reconsider
only
public space in the vicinity of our town.
Based on my experience, Correct article usage
the only
majority
of residents rely on Correct article usage
the majority
this
public park
whenever they want
do physical exercises and Add the particle
want to
do
Unnecessary verb
apply
the
social gatherings. Correct article usage
apply
In addition
, playground
in the Correct article usage
the playground
park
has been a favourite spot for children, which is usually crowded with them, especially on their holidays. If this
essential park
for many resident
is demolished , they could not find the other places. Change to a plural noun
residents
Hence
, I would like to suggest an alternative solution, renovating the existing carpark to the multi-storeyed carpark. As a result
, the park
will be affected.
I hope that you can understand my explaination
, and my suggestion will be helpful for your future decision.
Best Regards,
AyeCorrect your spelling
explanation
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task achievement
In your second paragraph, try to add more specific examples or statistics to strengthen your argument for why the park is essential for residents.
coherence cohesion
Avoid minor grammatical errors. For instance, 'residents who have lived' should be 'resident who has lived'.
task achievement
It would be good to propose more than one alternative solution to the plan, to provide the council with multiple options to consider.
suitable writing tone
Your greeting and closing are appropriate and polite, setting a formal tone which is suitable for a letter to the mayor.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph contains a single idea, making your points clear and understandable.