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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is a problem about a traffic on roads around the world. It is undeniable that transportation by the car has become an essential part of our life. However, these days it become much difficult and create a traffic jam.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
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traffic
 on roads around the world. It is undeniable that transportation by
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car has become an essential part of our life.
However
, these days it become much
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 and create a
traffic
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 sophisticated walking,
also
 driving. One of the main reasons behind
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 number of cars and population.
This
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traffic
 in cities or might result in
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 of
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time of human when waiting end of
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 jam. To tackle
this
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 people should decide
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 issue with their government and should pay taxes because of
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the pollution
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 air and
environment
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.
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 and probably
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bicycle or electronic cars. Having weighed everything mentioned
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, we can come to
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 conclusion that
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a decision for
traffic
 problems at a
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 level and at an individual level is in our
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. So it would not be surprising to see some better changes in the near future.
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