You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The line graph illustrates the percentage of the

pupulaton

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population

who's

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age is 65 and above in three nations from 1940 to 2040.

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dominated Sweden and the

USA

by the end of the recorded period and the

USA

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the

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population by the end of the period. In 1940, the

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the highest population than Sweden and Japan with around 9%, and

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upper hand continued till

near

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2000

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dominated by Sweden

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2000 to 2040 with 25 percentage and the

USA

settled down at nearly 23%.

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a significant change over the entire period, In the

begining

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1940 it has 5% of

population

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the population

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and it

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gradually increased to nearly 4% in 19560 and

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proportion

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continued till 1980 and

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steady rise till 2030 and

then

it is dramatically increased to 27% by the end of 2040.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

157 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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