Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reason why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The motives behind learning a foreign

language

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quite puzzling.

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some believe that it solely stems from

people

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wanting to be able to pursue working or travelling in a foreign country, I,

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others firmly believe that the other underlying motives

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as cognitive development and cross-cultural understanding

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may lead to

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phenomenon.

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with, some may claim that the motivation behind cultivating a foreign country's

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, comes from nothing but the urge to work in or travel

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there. With being able to communicate efficiently with indigenous

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, migrants would have greater possibilities to be integrated

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the host country's community, in both social and financial aspects. In

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situation, migrants can benefit from greater job vacancies and in travel cases,

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powerful

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understanding

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society. To illustrate, a study conducted at the

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of Arkansas, demonstrated that among international pupils, those who

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had cultivated

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the English

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language

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before coming to Arkansas

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had the best academic performance and healthiest relationships. These benefits

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that individuals would go after learning a second

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if they grasp the impeccable effects of it on their occupational and social experiences.

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, occupational and travelling aspirations may not be the sole indicators. In the majority of

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societies

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people

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are trying to foster

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knowledge to improve their mental abilities. Since learning a new

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serves as a stimulator for the brain, triggers the cognitive processes in the brain and

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, enhances

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individual

memory,

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are eager to do so.

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learning process enables individuals to go

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society

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explore

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foreign ones and

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different aspects of a specific matter;

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, they would be able to think critically, enriching their mental abilities even more. Take

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students as an example; who start to learn

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at their

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private

schools. After these courses, students not only have triggered some parts of their brain that would not

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otherwise

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cultivated critical thinking about the French society since they now know more about their cultures.

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work and travel aspirations are

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the major motives behind becoming multilingual, they are not the only reasons. In fact,

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Task Achievement

Your introduction presents a clear thesis. However, it could benefit from a bit more clarity and precision. Try to articulate your stance more decisively.

Coherence and Cohesion

Make sure that your conclusion ties back to your introduction. Your essay ends rather abruptly and doesn't clearly summarize your points or restate your thesis.

Coherence and Cohesion

Proofread your work to catch minor grammatical errors and typos such as 'priamary', 'understandying', and 'individauls' which can disrupt the flow of reading.

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Your essay demonstrates a very good understanding of the topic and presents relevant ideas.

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The examples you used, such as the University of Arkansas study, add credibility to your argument and help to illustrate your points.

Coherence and Cohesion

The essay is generally well-organized and paragraphs are used effectively to present different points.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

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With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?