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The chart below shows the percentage of difference in income between men and women from 1978 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of difference in income between men and women from 1978 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrated the change
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income
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the income
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 amount of genders over 3 decades.
Overall
, there are 5 countries distributed
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in
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 3 groups the highest,
middles
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middle
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 and lowest. They were decreasing
amoung
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among
 the decades but Australia jumped just over 20% in 2008.
To begin
with
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 the highest amount of changing
income
 between men and women in
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Japan
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 was less than 50% in 1978.
Moreover
, continued decreasing over 3 decades to end at just above 40% in 2008. As for the middle countries are US and
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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, they were around each other in the differences
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in
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income
.
While
 in 1978
US
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the US
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 was higher than
UK
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the UK
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 at above 30% and
UK
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the UK
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less
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 than 30%, both of them constantly decreased to reach less than 30% in 2008.
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, the lowest countries are France and Australia they both were under 20% in 1978 and continued decreasing.
However
, in 2008 Australia jumped to
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above 20% and France continued dropping. In conclusion, we can notice
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that over
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 the years the difference between
men
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men's
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 and
women
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women's
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income
 is decreasing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "jumped" was used 2 times.
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