There are a growing demand for fresh water nowadays and this is becoming a global problem. What are the causes and solutions.

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a topic of discussion.There
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increasing require for fresh
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at present times,
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is promoting worldwide
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massive trouble. The issue of lack of
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is growing rapidly around the globe for the time being.
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, from my perspective, the most detrimental
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nobody can live without
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, especially individuals. If we don't have much
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in the world. There may be drought and for one thing, we must economize the potable. Since
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fresh is diminishing day by day.
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recent years, As we know, Africa and other countries
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from potable. Now, we know that
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we use the clean
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overbalance.
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, our factories and plastics, rubbish,
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poison clean
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. We need to decrease factories.
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toxic smoke is influential and detrimental
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potable. The
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may be toxic. In order to resolve
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issue I deem that its root causes should be first addressed. Perhaps, the most effective method of doing
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would be rescue from
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shortage. Some people turn on the tap at
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unimportant time. We should turn off the faucet. If some
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just turn on the faucet. The government must
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the world had created all things with
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. The
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is much more. But clean
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is declining.
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, In the world, salty
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is 97 per cent.
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. Potable is 3 per cent.
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coherence cohesion
Focus on improving your introduction and conclusion to provide a clear overview and summary of your essay. Make sure the introduction introduces the topic clearly and the conclusion summarizes your main points effectively.
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Develop your main points with more specific examples and explanations. For instance, you can mention specific industries or practices that exacerbate water scarcity and suggest more detailed solutions.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving sentence structure and grammar. Using varied sentence structures and correct grammar will improve the clarity and readability of your essay.
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The essay addresses the topic and covers both causes and solutions, demonstrating a clear understanding of the issue.
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You have made an effort to identify specific causes of water scarcity, such as pollution and overuse of clean water, and suggested solutions like conservation and penalties for wastage.

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