You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, •explain why you changed jobs •describe your new job •tell him / her your other news
Dear Alfian,
Hello Alfian, how are you? I hope
this
letter find
you in good condition. I am writing Change the verb form
finds
this
letter to told
you about my new life now in Wrong verb form
tell
new
company where I Add an article
a new
was
started work recently.
As we know, recently I have Verb problem
have
occupation
in one of the bigger Add an article
an occupation
factory
in my city, but I am Change to a plural noun
factories
inconvenience
Wrong verb form
inconvenienced
on
my Change preposition
in
job
because I feel never gain my satisfaction there, therefore
I am
Verb problem
have
decide
to leave my work and find a new Wrong verb form
decided
job
in another place to enhance my skills and reach my goals .
Unexpected, I am gain
a new Wrong verb form
gained
job
in Malaysia where suitable with
my skills. Change preposition
to
Curentely
, I have Correct your spelling
Currently
job
on advertisement for all kind of equipment which will be sold in some company inside Kuala Lumpur City. Add an article
a job
Finally
, I find a new job
which suitable with
my background and my major it can Change preposition
for
be enhance
my abilities and reach my goals.
Change the verb form
enhance
In addition
, I life
in Replace the word
live
Correct article usage
a comfertable
comfertable apartement
in Correct your spelling
comfortable apartment
suburbun
Correct article usage
a suburbun
oh
Correct your spelling
of
city
and near by Correct article usage
the city
shooping
Correct your spelling
shopping
central
, Replace the word
centre
therefore
i able
to find all of my needs earlier and make me feel easier to Add a missing verb
am able
life
in Replace the word
live
this
country.
Hopefully, you have the time to visit my apartement
Correct your spelling
apartment
on
your leisure time, so we can Change preposition
in
hangaround
together Correct your spelling
hang around
her
to enjoy the journey.
Correct your spelling
here
your
sincerely
David,Correct the word
yours
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task achievement
Your letter covers all the necessary points but needs more details to fully explain your job change and new job.
coherence cohesion
Work on refining transitions between paragraphs for smoother flow.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear greeting and closing, adding a personal touch.
task achievement
You have covered all the points asked in the prompt.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite