You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, •explain why you changed jobs •describe your new job •tell him / her your other news

Dear Alfian, Hello Alfian, how are you? I hope
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letter
find
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you in good condition. I am writing
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letter to
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you about my new life now in
new
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a new
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company where I
was
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started work recently. As we know, recently I have
occupation
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in one of the bigger
factory
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in my city, but I am
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on
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my
job
because I feel never gain my satisfaction there,
therefore
I
am
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decide
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to leave my work and find a new
job
in another place to enhance my skills and reach my goals . Unexpected, I
am gain
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a new
job
in Malaysia where suitable
with
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my skills.
Curentely
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Currently
, I have
job
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on advertisement for all kind of equipment which will be sold in some company inside Kuala Lumpur City.
Finally
, I find a new
job
which suitable
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my background and my major it can
be enhance
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my abilities and reach my goals.
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, I
life
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in
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a comfertable
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comfertable apartement
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comfortable apartment
in
suburbun
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a suburbun
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oh
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of
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city
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the city
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and near by
shooping
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shopping
central
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,
therefore
i
able
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to find all of my needs earlier and make me feel easier to
life
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in
this
country. Hopefully, you have the time to visit my
apartement
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apartment
on
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your leisure time, so we can
hangaround
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hang around
together
her
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here
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to enjoy the journey.
your
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sincerely David,
Submitted by patricius.yohanes on

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task achievement
Your letter covers all the necessary points but needs more details to fully explain your job change and new job.
coherence cohesion
Work on refining transitions between paragraphs for smoother flow.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear greeting and closing, adding a personal touch.
task achievement
You have covered all the points asked in the prompt.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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