The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
The given bar chart shows how much
percentage
of
people
born in
Autsralia
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Australia
and it shows
people
who were born outside
Australia
livng
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living
in urban, rural and
town
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towns
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from 1995 to 2010. In
genereal
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general
, cities
had been
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were
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crowded in 1995 and 2010 but
towns
and rural areas very changed. In 1995,
percentage
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the percentage
show examples
of
people
born in
Australia
was almost 50
percent
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per cent
show examples
and it increased to just over 60
percent
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per cent
show examples
in 2010.
People
who
born
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were born
show examples
in
Australia
's
towns
was
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were
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20
percent
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per cent
show examples
in 1995 and it decreased slightly to almost
percent
18.
Number
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A number
The number
show examples
of
people
born in
Australia
's rural areas was approximately 30
percent
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per cent
show examples
in 1995 and it fell to
percentage
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the percentage
a percentage
show examples
of
towns
in 2010.
Percentage
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The percentage
show examples
of
people
born
in
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apply
show examples
outside
Australia's
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Australia
show examples
was 60
percent
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per cent
show examples
when started and it increased dramatically to 80
percent
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per cent
show examples
.
Number
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A number
The number
show examples
of
people
who
born
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were born
show examples
in
Australia
's
towns
had been
Wrong verb form
was
show examples
almost 10
percent
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per cent
show examples
in 1995 and it didn't change.
Percentage
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The percentage
show examples
of
people
born
in
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apply
show examples
outside
Australia
was 40
percent
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per cent
show examples
but it
decreas
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decreased
decreases
decrease
sharply to no more no less
5
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than 5
show examples
percent
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per cent
show examples
in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people, australia, towns, percent with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • urbanization
  • migration patterns
  • population distribution
  • percentage points
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend analysis
  • socioeconomic factors
  • infrastructure development
  • rural exodus
  • census data
  • lifestyle changes
  • residential patterns
  • immigration policies
  • emigration
  • natural increase
  • birth rate
  • settlement patterns
  • push and pull factors
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