The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countriesin 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countriesin 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts illustrate the kinds of electricity sources fabricated in 2003 in 4 different countries. In general,
hydropowerpower
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hydropower power
and fossil
fuel
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fuels
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are produced by all of the countries included
while
nuclear power is only available in India and Sweden.
To begin
with, India produced more than three quarter fossil
fuel
while
Vietnam only produced more than half of its full kind production of sources. Different from those two, Morocco and Sweden produced
hydropowerpower
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hydropower power
. Morocco produced 95%
while
the rest percentage is fossil
fuel
. Sweden is the only country
produces
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that produces
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almost 45 per cent of its nuclear power and
produced
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produces
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less than 5 per cent of fossil
fuel
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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