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The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countriesin 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countriesin 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the
electricity
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 produced by fossil
fuel
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,
hydropower
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, and Nuclear
power
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 in India,
Sweden
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, Morocco, and Vietnam in 2003.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that India and
Sweden
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 used 3
power
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 plants but Morocco and Vietnam only used 2
power
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 plants.
Moreover
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, Hydro-
Power
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 had the highest proportion
to produce
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of producing
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energy
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 in Morocco. In 2003, the majority of percentage to produce
energy
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 in India by Fossil
fuel
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, which was at 82%.
Then
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,
Hydropower
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 and Nuclear
Power
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 produced 14% and 4%, respectively.
Furthermore
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,
Sweden
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 which used renewable
energy
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 was Nuclear
power
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 and
Hydropower
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 for producing
energy
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, which was 52% and 44% but
Sweden
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also
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 produced
electricity
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 by fossil
fuel
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, which at 4%.
On the other hand
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, Morroco almost
use
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uses
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 clean
energy
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 to produce
electricity
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. It was Hydropowerpower, which at 95% but Morroco still used Fossil
fuel
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, which at 5%.
In addition
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, Vietnam used 56% unrenewable
energy
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 which was fossil
fuel
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 to produce
electricity
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 and used 44% renewable
energy
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 which was
hydropower
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, fuel, hydropower, power, sweden, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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