The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph compares the
number
of British males and females, who continued their study, during three decades, and shows if they pursued full-time or part-time education. It is evident that
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the majority of them had part-time classes, and the
number
of educated people
were
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approximately the same between the genders.
According to
the data, the
number
of educated women in part-time study had an upward trend and were
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in 1990-91 and reached more than 1000
thousand
.
However
, their
nember
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number
numbers
had experienced a significant drop in 1970-71, nearly 700
thousand
. At the outset of the period, the
number
of men, who followed their higher education
were
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around 1000
thousand
, and it saw a slight decrease in 1980-81 reaching less than 900
thousand
.
Following
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by almost 100
thousand
growth in 1990-91. The
number
of both genders who participated in the
full time
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courses
were
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kept under 200
thousand
during the era.
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