The chart below shows the percentage of difference in income between men and women from 1978 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of difference in income between men and women from 1978 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart provides us with some information about the
percentage
of difference in income between men and women during three decades starting in 1978. What is obvious is, despite the unbelievable increase in
Australia
, Other countries including Japan, the USA,
France
and the
UK
experienced a downfall.
Therefore
, in the four countries of five that
this
chart shows us, women’s income is near to witnessing equality more than ever.
To begin
with, Japan has the most difference between men’s and women’s income and no matter what, it always takes the lead in these statistics.
However
, in the
beginning
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year which is 1978, Japan had approximately a 50% difference and over time it decreased considerably and it ended up being 40%. Regarding the second and third places which contain the US and the
UK
, They approximately experience same path and have declined over
this
period.
Although
the
UK
has a bigger
percentage
at first(it is almost 33%
whereas
the
UK
is below 30
percent
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)
also
it has a sharper decrease over the first two decades. In the end, both US and
UK
finished where they started respectively 2nd(28%) and 3rd(27%).
Finally
, the
last
two places belong to
France
and
Australia
. In the starting year(1978),
France
and
Australia
have thereabouts 20 percent with respectively 19% and 17%. Regarding the first two decades, they both have a relatively reduced and
France
has a higher
percentage
.
However
, in 1998,
Australia
overtook
France
and over a decade it climbed and levelled out at 25% and second place
whereas
France
had the lowest
percentage
at 18%.
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