The table below shows the results of surveys of people in the UK, carried out in 3 different decades. It shows the percentages of people who said they were interested in certain sports.

The table below shows the results of surveys of people in the UK, carried out in 3 different decades. It shows the percentages of people who said they were interested in certain sports.
The chart illustrates the proportion of different sports enjoyed by people in the UK in 1990, 2000, and 2010.
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, there was an increase in the percentages of rugby, cricket, and swimming, with the number of residents who enjoyed playing rugby witnessing
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a drop was seen in the data of football, golf, and judo. The percentage of inhabitants interested in playing rugby started at a mere 12%, after which it rose remarkably to 20% in 2000, before reaching the end of the period by increasing double to 24%. The figure for those who loved cricket and swimming was at 12% and 15% in
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1990, followed by a marginal growth to 14% and 16% in 2010, which means
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football in 1990, with a gradual downward trend to 56% in 2010. The figure for fans of golf witnessed equivalent changes, maintained at 28% in 1990 and 2000, after which it declined slightly to 26% in 2010. The figure for subscribers of Judo decreased considerably
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compared to its data , from 9% in 1990 to 4% in 2010.
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