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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how
Australia
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 exported its products to four countries, including
Japan
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, the US,
China
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, and
India
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, between 1990 and 2012.
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, there was an increase in the proportion of Australian
exports
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 to
India
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 and
China
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, with the most dramatic rise being seen in the latter, making it the largest export destination for
Australia
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 by the end of the
period
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.
In contrast
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,
exports
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 to the US and
Japan
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 experienced a decrease over the given timeframe. Looking at the chart in more detail, in 1990, among the four destinations,
India
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 and
China
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 were the smallest export partners for
Australia
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, with negligible figures of 1% and 2%, respectively.
Thereafter
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,
China
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's importance significantly increased over the
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, as the percentage of
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 to
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 country steadily rose to 5% by 2000, before surging more than fivefold to 27% in the final year.
Likewise
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,
India
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 maintained a marginal presence in
Australia
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's export market, at just 1% for the first decade, after which its share slightly increased, reaching a peak of 7% in 2010, before falling back to 5% two years later. With regard to the remaining countries, in the first year,
Japan
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 was the leading destination shown for Australian goods, with more than a quarter of total
exports
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 going there, twice the figure for the US, at 11%. In the following years, the figures for
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 fell to 17%
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 and stayed unchanged in the two final years.
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, the share of Australian
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 to the US underwent a downward fluctuation throughout the
period
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, bottoming out at 5% in 2010 before a modest recovery to 7% by the end of the
period
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, japan, china, india, exports, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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