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Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend.In your letter •say how important New Year is to people in your country •describe how New Year celebrated in your country •explain what you like about New Year celebratios in your country.

#friend #college #project #year #countries #•say #people #country #•describe #•explain #celebratios
Dear,Jade I hope these tips will help you
for
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 your college project
doing
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about celebrating New
Year
 in different countries.Both old people and children look forward to the New
Year
. In light
of
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,New
Year
 is a family
holiday
. Especially,in my
country
 New
Year
 cannot
be repeat
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.
This
 is
day
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the day
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 people
to be
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a
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happy,
positivity
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, funny and
to
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dreams
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.They believe
this
 day be different and achieve their all dreams. Everyone wants to welcome New
Year
 with their family or next of
kins
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.They
celebrating
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holiday
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the holiday
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 with special commotion.
In addition
,in my
country
 as the New
Year
 approaches, everyone starts decorating their homes and New
Year
's trees. Santa Claus
walk
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 in front of New
Year
's trees on the street.In the
holiday
,everyone
setting
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festive
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a festive
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 table . At the 00:00
o'clock
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 people intend for next
year
. And they believe that all the bad days will remain in the past
year
. We always celebrate the New
Year
 as a family . When midnight in our
country
 fireworks and lanterns start flying in the sky.
This
 is really gorgeous!
Besides
,we go to our close friends, relatives and
neighbors
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.Or they come to us.But there are families who want to celebrate
holiday
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the holiday
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 in another
country
. I
ponder
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,
these are
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informations
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are
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 suitable for your college project
doing
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about celebrating New
Year
 in different countries. I hope you understand correctly
,
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if there are any mistakes. By Fatima
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coherence cohesion
Work more on logical sequencing of ideas to make your letter flow more naturally.
task achievement
Ensure your writing tone is slightly more formal to match the letter format.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear greeting and closing in your letter, which is great.
task achievement
Your letter covers all the key points requested in the prompt.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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