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Last month you had a holiday overseas .Where you stay  with some friends.They just sent you some holiday photos.       Write  a letter your friends,in your letter:       •thank them for the holiday and the photos       •explain why do you didn't write earlier.       •invite them to come and  stay with you

#month #holiday #friends #photos #•thank #•explain #•invite
Hi.my dears!!!              Well actually, I didn't regret
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travel
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 for my holiday overseas.I had a great time with you guys.I will never forget the times I spent with my friends.These
pictures
 are amazing.             The
picture
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 really excellent.The
pictures
 cheer me up.I feel like I'm back again in time.Thank you,very much for sending me the
pictures
.I like these
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pictures
.Because these are
pictures
 remember memories with you.            I apologize for not writing earlier .Because I
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couldn't
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due to
 various personal problems.I hope you are not angry
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 me for
this
 .         I want you will come
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 country and stay with me.Because my country is
also
 amazing,ancient and there are many places for
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 time.I think you will like these places and our day will be spent in joy,just like
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before.             I hope you will
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consider
 my proposal and agree.I'm glad to write
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 you and I will
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 your reply.           By your friend Fatima
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suitable writing tone
Try to avoid overly casual expressions like 'Hi, my dears!!!' in formal letters. A slightly more formal greeting can improve your letter’s tone.
single idea per paragraph
Make sure each paragraph develops a single idea thoroughly before moving on to the next topic. This can make your writing clearer.
logical structure
Pay attention to grammatical errors and ensure that all sentences are complete and correctly punctuated.
complete response
You effectively expressed gratitude and the joy of reminiscing through the photos.
greeting and closing
The closing of your letter invites further communication and interaction, which is very positive.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
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