Last month you had a holiday overseas .Where you stay with some friends.They just sent you some holiday photos. Write a letter your friends,in your letter: •thank them for the holiday and the photos •explain why do you didn't write earlier. •invite them to come and stay with you

#month #holiday #friends #photos #•thank #•explain #•invite

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Hi.my dears!!! Well actually, I didn't regret

choosen

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choosing

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travel

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for my holiday overseas.I had a great time with you guys.I will never forget the times I spent with my friends.These

pictures

are amazing. The

picture

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really excellent.The

pictures

cheer me up.I feel like I'm back again in time.Thank you,very much for sending me the

pictures

.I like these

are

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pictures

.Because these are

pictures

remember memories with you. I apologize for not writing earlier .Because I

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couldn't

write

due to

various personal problems.I hope you are not angry

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me for

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. I want you will come

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country and stay with me.Because my country is

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amazing,ancient and there are many places for

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a wonderful

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time.I think you will like these places and our day will be spent in joy,just like

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before. I hope you will

comsider

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consider

my proposal and agree.I'm glad to write

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you and I will

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your reply. By your friend Fatima

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suitable writing tone

Try to avoid overly casual expressions like 'Hi, my dears!!!' in formal letters. A slightly more formal greeting can improve your letter’s tone.

single idea per paragraph

Make sure each paragraph develops a single idea thoroughly before moving on to the next topic. This can make your writing clearer.

logical structure

Pay attention to grammatical errors and ensure that all sentences are complete and correctly punctuated.

complete response

You effectively expressed gratitude and the joy of reminiscing through the photos.

greeting and closing

The closing of your letter invites further communication and interaction, which is very positive.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

6.5

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

7.5

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

7.5

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

156 words

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The Greeting

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