The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The following graph illustrates the
temperature
in New York from January to
June
,
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2012
along with
the sales of bathing suits.
Overall
, the highest total revenue earned from selling bathing suites occurred in April, meanwhile the lowest was in
June
.
Conversely
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with the lowest revenue, the highest average
temperature
also
occurred in
June
. In detail, the income yielded
during
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January to March gradually increased from 100
dollars
to 150
dollar
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. It almost doubled in April, recorded at about 290
dollars
. But there was an abrupt drop in May which accounted
under
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100
dollars
.
This
revenue continued to plunge to nearly 20
dollars
in
June
.
On the other hand
, there was an upward trend
on
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average monthly temperatures. The coolest
temperature
was in February, recorded at 30 Fahrenheit and the warmest was in
June
, approximately 65 Fahrenheit. The correlation
of
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temperature
and
the
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bathing suit sales was in line from January to April.
However
, it did not follow the previous pattern in May and
June
. The
temperature
for the
last
two months
were
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the highest
instead
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, june, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperatures
  • bathing suit sales
  • correlation
  • monthly breakdown
  • significant changes
  • warmest months
  • speculate
  • trends
  • increase in temperature
  • contrasting
  • predictive speculation
  • general trends
  • specific months
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