The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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valuable insight into the number of participants in the four-ball games of
rugby
, tennis,
basketball
and
badminton
over the twenty-year period from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
,
rugby
has seen a significant decline in
popularity
over time, but tennis has had the opposite trend of growth.
However
,
basketball
and
badminton
were relatively stable and had minor fluctuations. In 1985,
rugby
was the leading sport with around 140
players
. Over the next 10 years, its
popularity
grew steadily, and by 1995, it had reached 200
players
per tennis category.
However
,
after
this
peak,
rugby
's
popularity
declined sharply and by 2005 it was down to just 50
players
, matching the number of participants in
badminton
.
In addition
,
basketball
and
badminton
started as the smallest sports with about 80 and 60
players
respectively in 1985 . Of the two sports, participation declined the least, with
badminton
losing just over 10
players
in its first five years. Over the years, their
popularity
followed a similar pattern, with 80
basketball
players
and 50
badminton
players
at the end
of
this
period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rugby, basketball, badminton, popularity, players with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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