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Band 5.5

mrs barret, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her home for a few hours a day next summer. WRITE a letter to mrs bareett. in your letter suggest how you could help her in her home say why you would like to do this work explain when you will and will not be available

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Dear Mrs Barrett, I am writing in connection with the advertisement which was asked about someone in order to assist you for a few hours on a daily basis between 21 June and 28 June. I am Mah Kar who
study
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 pharmacy at White College and I wish
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part- time
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 job that suits my personality.
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, I can help you
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 different matters
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 planting some flowers, looking after pets and paying
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 factors. To explain more, I am an introverted person and treating pets and
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 are soothing for me.
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, they can add more joy and zest
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 my life.
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 of increasing the dormitory fees, I find it difficult to pay my tuition
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 semester.
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, I would like to help you in your home.
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, my university classes
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 being available all
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. Should you need to
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 the phone
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 I am reached on 0912 on Sundays and Tuesdays. I am looking forward
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 your response. Yours sincerely, Mah Ka

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task achievement
Consider elaborating further on the specific tasks you can help with at Mrs. Barrett's home to provide a complete response to the task. This might enhance the clarity and specificity of your letter.
coherence cohesion
Ensure all paragraphs convey a single clear idea to maintain coherence. This will improve the logical structure and flow of your letter
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately used, which provides a polite framework for the letter.
task achievement
The writing tone is suitable and polite, making it appropriate for a formal letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household chores
  • errands
  • meal preparation
  • companionship
  • availability
  • flexible schedule
  • duties
  • responsibilities
  • commitment
  • summer job
  • helping hand
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