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the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011

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The given bar chart illustrates different
age
groups
 of citizens in one country who used three types of media to receive daily news during 2011.
Overall
, it can be seen that individuals would rather use the
radio
 than other media to update the world's news as they get older.
Additionally
, a majority of people used
radio
 in most
age
groups
, with the exception of those 10–17
years
 old. Starting with the two youngest
age
groups
, which witnessed the same percentage of people using social media, they accounted for 80%. As for microblogging, it could not even make up one-third of the proportion of users,
while
radio
 saw a significant increase, from 40% to more than 90% of the
age
 group of 10–17
years
 old to 18–29
years
 old, respectively. Turning to the remaining
age
groups
, the older individuals were, the less care they had about daily news. In terms of microblogging, its users from different
age
groups
 only ranged between 10% and 20%,
whereas
 on the opposite side, the range of
radio
 was from about 85% to 90%. Meanwhile, social networking users decreased from 50% in the
age
 group 30-49
years
 old to 25%, less than it was two times for people over 65
years
 old.
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