Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say how important New Year is to people in your country • describe how New Year is celebrated in your country • explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country
Dear Konsti
Thanks for asking my opinion about
New
Correct article usage
the New
Year
celebration. In Taiwan, New Year
is a huge holiday persented
a new beginning Correct your spelling
presented
of
life. We get Change preposition
in
together with
friends or family in
New Change preposition
on
Year
evening after work, sharing things Change noun form
Year's
happened
recently when having dinner. Correct pronoun usage
that happened
Than
everyone will gather Replace the word
Then
to
a hill or a place which Change preposition
on
have
a clear sky to enjoy a Correct subject-verb agreement
has
fire work
show. In order to build up Correct your spelling
firework
connection
between friends and family, Fix the agreement mistake
connections
therefore
, no one will be left in
New Change preposition
on
Year
evening.
Change noun form
Year's
However
, in Chinese culture, we have another traditional New Year
on
February, Change preposition
in
this
event will be more important in family bonding than friends.
Hope Correct word choice
and this
this
information will help you a lots
in your project.
Best Correct the article-noun agreement
lot
Rigard
DavidCorrect your spelling
Regard
Submitted by d11206 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
task achievement
Try to proofread your letter for small grammatical and spelling errors. For example, 'persented' should be 'presented' and 'than' should be 'then'. This will make your letter look more polished.
task achievement
You can add a bit more detail about why you enjoy the New Year celebrations in Taiwan to make your response even more complete.
coherence cohesion
Consider improving the logical flow by using more linking words and phrases, like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Additionally', to make the structure clearer.
coherence cohesion
Be mindful of singular and plural forms, as well as verb tenses, to improve overall coherence. For example, 'a fire work show' should be 'a fireworks show'.
greeting and closing
Your closing statement is warm and appropriate for a letter to a friend.
task achievement
You have successfully covered all the points required by the task, making your letter informative and helpful.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a friendly and conversational tone which is suitable for writing to a friend.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,