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The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart delineates a comparison of the average working
hours
 among elementary, middle, and high
school
teachers
 across four distinct countries in 2001. Notably, it is evident that
teachers
 in the
USA
 dedicated longer
hours
 to work than their counterparts.
Additionally
, the working
hours
 of high
school
teachers
 exceeded those at primary and lower secondary levels. At the primary
school
 level,
teachers
 in the
USA
 logged approximately 750
hours
, surpassing Spain’s working
hours
 by a notable margin of 100. Meanwhile, Japan and Iceland registered slightly lower working durations, approximately 600 and 580
hours
, respectively. Moving to the lower secondary
school
 level,
teachers
 in the
USA
 experienced a considerable increase of around 250
hours
 compared to primary educators. Spain demonstrated a moderate rise of 100
hours
,
while
 Japan and Iceland showcased marginal differences, with an increase of approximately 50
hours
 or less. Examining the upper secondary
school
teachers
’ workload, the
USA
 maintained the highest working
hours
,
totaling
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 just under 1200
hours
,
while
 Japan recorded the lowest at 700
hours
.
Teachers
 in Spain and Iceland reported similar working durations, at approximately 900
hours
 each.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, school, teachers, usa with synonyms.
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