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The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart delineates a comparison of the average working
hours
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 among elementary, middle, and high
school
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teachers
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 across four distinct countries in 2001. Notably, it is evident that
teachers
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 in the
USA
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 dedicated longer
hours
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 to work than their counterparts.
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, the working
hours
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 of high
school
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teachers
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 exceeded those at primary and lower secondary levels. At the primary
school
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 level,
teachers
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 in the
USA
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 logged approximately 750
hours
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, surpassing Spain’s working
hours
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 by a notable margin of 100. Meanwhile, Japan and Iceland registered slightly lower working durations, approximately 600 and 580
hours
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, respectively. Moving to the lower secondary
school
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 level,
teachers
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 in the
USA
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 experienced a considerable increase of around 250
hours
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 compared to primary educators. Spain demonstrated a moderate rise of 100
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,
while
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 Japan and Iceland showcased marginal differences, with an increase of approximately 50
hours
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 or less. Examining the upper secondary
school
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teachers
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’ workload, the
USA
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 maintained the highest working
hours
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,
totaling
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 just under 1200
hours
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,
while
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 Japan recorded the lowest at 700
hours
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.
Teachers
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 in Spain and Iceland reported similar working durations, at approximately 900
hours
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 each.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, school, teachers, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual hours of teaching
  • teaching workload
  • educational systems
  • teacher-student ratio
  • significantly
  • slightly
  • noticeably
  • gap
  • highest/lowest number of hours
  • compare
  • contrast
  • reflect
  • variations
  • distribution of teaching hours
  • average
  • respectively
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