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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure illustrates the process by which hydropower is used to generate
electricity
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 at the
power
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 station.
Overall
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, there are three stages in the process, commencing with the collection of
water
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 in the river and culminating with the generation of
electricity
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 at the
power
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 plant. Looking closer at the diagram, we can see that
water
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 in the river flows into the dam, which operates differently between day and night. During the day, the flow of
water
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 runs to the
power
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 station, which is responsible for generating
electricity
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 through the operation of the renewable turbines pumping
water
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 to the generator.
This
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 machine produces
electricity
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, which leads to the
power
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 lines that serve households, schools, hospitals, and factories. During the night, the reversible turbines work to pump
water
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 back from low-level reservoirs to high-level reservoirs.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, power, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • turbine
  • generate electricity
  • transmit
  • low-level reservoir
  • high-level reservoir
  • dam
  • cycle of electricity production
  • energy storage
  • flowing water
  • sustainability
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