The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart
demonstrate
the data about the method that Change the verb form
demonstrates
children
from the age of 11 to 16 used to travel to school within
the United Kingdom one particular year.
Change preposition
in
Overall
it can be seen that,
most Remove the comma
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
children
chose to walk or cylce
when the distance is under 2 Correct your spelling
cycle
miles
, whereas
bus
was a popular option for over 5 Correct article usage
the bus
miles
distance. In addition
, there was
no Change the verb form
were
children
chose
to travel by walking or cycling for the distance that Correct pronoun usage
who chose
over
2 Add a missing verb
was over
miles
.
For the
journeys less than 1 mile, walking had the highest choice with exactly 90% ,and Correct article usage
apply
also
higher than bicycle
Add an article
a bicycle
for
40%. Change preposition
with
However
, travelling by car
and bus
were
much Correct subject-verb agreement
was
lesser
, only nearly 10% of Correct word choice
less
children
chose this
way to travel under 1 mile. From 1 to 2 miles
, the majority of student
use Fix the agreement mistake
students
bicycle
to go to school, about 78% Fix the agreement mistake
bicycles
while
on foot was only 60%, whereas
car
and bus
were considerably lower, at 20% and 10%, respectively.
In 2
to 5 Correct article usage
the 2
miles
category, Correct article usage
the bus
bus
Fix the agreement mistake
buses
have
the most choice with approximately 50% and Wrong verb form
had
Add an article
the bicycle
a bicycle
bicycle
was lower a little bit, about 49%, Fix the agreement mistake
bicycles
moreover
, car
and on foot were 25% and 31%, respectively. Fix the agreement mistake
cars
Finally
, for over 5 miles
, bus
had the highest Add an article
the bus
per cent
of choice with 79% Correct your spelling
percentage
while
car
was only 21%. Add an article
the car
However
, there were
no selection in walking and cycling.Change the verb form
was
Submitted by Nghỉ hè vui vẻ cả nhà on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas, while".
▼
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words children, miles, bus, car with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼
Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+
Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!