The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the percentages of 4 categories of unemployed, morning
men
, morning women
, afternoon
men
and afternoon
women
, who spent their time in different occupations last
year in the UK.
Overall
, it is shown that housework, shopping, job hunting, visiting friends or relatives, gardening, TV and reading were the most common activities that all categories had while
decorating, walking, nothing/ sitting around, staying in bed, visiting town, playing sport and drinking were the most unusual.
To start with, we can observe that the highest number was 49% and it concerned the housework that morning women
did. On the other hand
, afternoon
women
had the lowest percentage at 0% for staying in bed and playing sports. Additionally
, the most morning men
were job hunters while
the most afternoon
men
watched TV. By contrast
, the housework was both morning and afternoon
women
's first choice. Finally
, the least morning males drank, and reached 2% while
the least afternoon
men
stayed in bed, and were 1%. Morning women
who had the lowest percentage at 1%, played sport and drank.Submitted by sssssraf on
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