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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the percentages of 4 categories of unemployed, morning
men
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, morning
women
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,
afternoon
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men
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 and
afternoon
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women
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, who spent their time in different occupations
last
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 year in the UK.
Overall
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, it is shown that housework, shopping, job hunting, visiting friends or relatives, gardening, TV and reading were the most common activities that all categories had
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 decorating, walking, nothing/ sitting around, staying in bed, visiting town, playing sport and drinking were the most unusual. To start with, we can observe that the highest number was 49% and it concerned the housework that morning
women
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 did.
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,
afternoon
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women
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 had the lowest percentage at 0% for staying in bed and playing sports.
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, the most morning
men
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 were job hunters
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 the most
afternoon
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men
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 watched TV.
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, the housework was both morning and
afternoon
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women
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's first choice.
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, the least morning males drank, and reached 2%
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 the least
afternoon
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men
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 stayed in bed, and were 1%. Morning
women
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 who had the lowest percentage at 1%, played sport and drank.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, afternoon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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