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the number of films produced in five countries in three years

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 the given chart is information pertaining to the film's production in five distinct nations during the three years.
Overall
, it can be seen that filmmaking in most countries recorded an upward trend, with the exception of its
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country
 A
coupled with
country
 D.
Additionally
, it can
also
 be observed that films produced in
country
 A saw the highest proportion throughout the
period
,
while
 the opposite was true for
country
 E in the same time frame. Looking at the films made in
country
 B more closely, its figures
initially
 stood at exactly
a
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half before rising slightly to just over 50% and ending the
period
 with 70%. The film industry in
country
 C made a similar pattern, its figures made up for just below 10% at the beginning and finished at around 28%. In reference to nation E, its percentage increased from below 10% to roughly 12% throughout the three-year
period
. Moving on to the remaining statistics, the number of movies made in
country
 A was exactly the same in both 2006 and 2007 with about 85%.
Then
 despite the decline to 80% in the final year, its figures still remained the highest proportion among the given countries. In terms of
country
 D, the production of the film hit the percentage of 15% in 2006 before making a decrease to 10% in 2007 and
finally
 went up to 13%
at the end
 of the
period
.
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introduction conclusion present
The essay provides a clear overview of the trends and notable points in the introduction.
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