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The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 diagram depicts how
the
Correct article usage
apply
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plastic
bottles
 are
recycling
Wrong verb form
recycled
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. It is clear from the diagram that there are nine steps for recycling
of
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apply
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plastic
bottles
.
According to
 what is shown, the process
start
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starts
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 when people take out their garbage which contains different
items
. After
that
Add a comma
that,
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 the garbage
are
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is
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carrying
Wrong verb form
carried
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 by garbage removal
worker
Fix the agreement mistake
workers
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 to
recycling
Add an article
the recycling
a recycling
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 centre. In
recycling
Correct article usage
the recycling
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 centre, the workers are isolating the
plastic
bottles
 from other
items
.
Subsequently
, the
plastic
bottles
 are
compressing
Wrong verb form
compressed
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 into blocks shape. The next step, the block of
plastic
bottles
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 crushing by two sharp wheels into bath water to wash.
Then
, the crushing of plastics
are producing of
Wrong verb form
produces
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plastic
 pellets. After that, the pellets are
heating
Wrong verb form
heated
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 under high
temperature
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temperatures
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 to form raw
material
Fix the agreement mistake
materials
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 which
are producing
Wrong verb form
produce
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 different and other
items
at the end
such
 as
plastic
bottles
,
T-shart
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T-shirts
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, bags,
and
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apply
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pens…etc.
To sum up
, we could say that we can
product
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produce
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 different and important
items
 from
west
Replace the word
Western
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plastic
bottles
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, bottles, items with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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