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The chart below gives information about the journeys to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year

The chart below gives information about the journeys to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year
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The given bar chart compares the ways to go to
school
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teenagers in the United Kingdom during a year.
Overall
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, as the
distance
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 gets farther, the way to go to
school
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 is shifted from being independent to counting on the drivers.
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, walking is chosen the most when it comes to 1-2
miles
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,
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 most students go to
school
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 by bus if the
distance
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 is over 5
miles
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. With regards to the two independent ways to commute to
school
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 where none of the teens are willing to go to
school
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 by these ways in over 5
miles
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. As for walking, under 1 mile
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about 90% of choices which outstand the other distances, nearly triples 2-5
miles
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 and 30% higher than 1-2
miles
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. In terms of bicycles, around 50% of teenagers commute to
school
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 by all distances, except for 1-2
miles
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 which far outnumbers the others, precisely at 78%. Turning the focus on the remaining means of transport which saw a minor fraction of the usage when it comes to under 1 mile, just under 10 % each. The usage of cars in both 1-2
miles
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 and over 5
miles
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 are quite similar, at about 20% of students,
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 2-5
miles
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distance
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 is bigger than that, it accounts for slightly over 30%. Meanwhile, commuting by bus for 2-5
miles
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as well as
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 over 5
miles
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 make up the majority of choices, exactly 50% and 68%, respectively.
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, the children who use the bus for 1-2
miles
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 are at least a fifth of those figures.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, distance, miles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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