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We should contribute to environment protection.Do you agree or disagree

#environment #protection
Environment
- is base for our life and existence
of
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 earth.
Environment
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The environment
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 is
natural
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the natural
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 surrounding that
at
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apply
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the
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our
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around.
Environment
's
defense
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defence
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 means protect
defense
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defence
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protect
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defense
 and
people
 from
people
's bad actions.
Environment
's
defense
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defence
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 is very important because it is close to decay.
Environment's
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defense
 means caring for and delivering.
Firstly
,
interesting
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about
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in
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environment's
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the environment's
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defense
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defence
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 has to spread namely
people
 have to know about protecting nature. We can stop it. Have to prompt
people
for planting
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to plant
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 trees. We must prevent
to
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apply
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cutting forests. Because of cutting
forests
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of forests
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 lots of
type
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types
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 of trees are decreasing. We have to note that only trees are
base
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the base
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 of oxygen in the earth.
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coherence cohesion
Work on the logical structure of your essay. Try to organize your thoughts in a clear, coherent manner, using paragraphs to separate different ideas or points.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to include a proper introduction and conclusion. The introduction should clearly state your position on the topic, and the conclusion should summarize your main points and restate your position.
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Focus on providing relevant and specific examples to support your main points. This will help to clarify your arguments and make your essay more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Try to avoid repetition and redundant phrases. This will help to make your writing more concise and impactful.
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Ensure that your ideas are clearly expressed and easy to understand. Avoid using overly complex sentence structures if they make your points less clear.
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You have a clear understanding of the importance of environmental protection.
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Your essay indicates a good intent to address the task and provide a complete response.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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