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Number of books borrowed from four village libraries. The line table shows the number of books that have been interacted from different four rural libraries since June and September 2014 and the pie chart presents

Number of books borrowed from four village libraries. The line table shows the number of books that have been interacted from different four rural libraries since June and September 2014 and the pie chart presents
The figures provide information about how much literature that brought out from four rural libraries as explained in a line chart and the variety of
books
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 borrowed by readers as described using a pie chart. To summarize, the trend line shows that each village has various trends and the pie shows that the fiction genre has the biggest portion of the type of
books
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 that are brought out by readers. On the line figure, each village has various trends from June until
September
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 2014. Sutton Wood shows fluctuating trends, after increasing in July from 250
books
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 to 275
books
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,
then
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 it had a sharp decrease in August to 100 and
then
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 soared significantly in
September
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 to 300. Ryeslip rural area showed a consistent downtrend from 300 borrowed
books
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 in June
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 declined to 250
books
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 in July and continued to August with 100
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also
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 in
September
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 it fell to 175
books
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. West Eaton and Church Mount almost have the same patterns that started with 50 borrowed
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 in June and ended up with 150 borrowed
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 in
September
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.
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, West Eaton showed a flat trend in the August -
September
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 2014 period with 150
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 after an increase from 100 borrowed
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 in July
while
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 the Church Mount area showed an uptrend from July with 100
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then
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 rose persistently to 125 borrowed
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 in August and rose to 150
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 on
September
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. The fiction genre dominated the portion of borrowed
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 with 43% of the total
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, leaving other genres with a huge gap. Biography
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 have a 19% share followed by History
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 and Science
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 with a 14% portion and Self-help placed in the
last
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 rank with 10%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, september with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • borrow rates
  • trend analysis
  • noticeable increases/decreases
  • factors influencing
  • library resources
  • community engagement
  • seasonal factors
  • implications for library services
  • future planning
  • reading habits
  • community interests
  • demographic aspects
  • genre popularity
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