The diagram shows how rainwter is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.

The diagram shows how rainwter is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.
The drawing depicts different steps in producing potable
water
from rainwater in an Australian region. As can be seen from the illustration, the process of generating drinkable
water
involves six main steps, starting with gathering rainwater and ending with distributing clean and safe drinking
water
. In the first stage, rainwater falling from the sky reaches the rooftop first and
then
moves through a system of connected drain pipes. The second step is that the muddy liquid flows through the
water
filter system, which makes it clean. After that, the filtered
water
runs to a large storage tank through another pipe. In the fourth step, the
water
is pumped into another container, where chemical substances are added to remove microparticles and ensure the drink is safe and potable.
Subsequently
,
this
purified liquid is pumped into each of the houses through another system of connected pipes. Eventually, Australian residents in the town could access drinkable
water
which is able to drink from faucets.
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