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Band 5

Some people think that building tall building is the best way to create more housing space, while other people believe it's better to build many houses on land. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the present world, a lot of
people
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 especially young working
people
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 tend to live in the city center or near the industrial areas more than rural areas. These are the reasons why
the
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apply
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accommodation
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accommodations
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 like
condominiums
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 and apartment blocks have
constructed
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been constructed
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nearby
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near
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 the city. Some individuals believe that high-rise building is the most efficient way to create more housing
space
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while
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 others think that
build
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building
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the
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houses
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 on
land
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 is better. I personally think that living in
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a
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house
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 is far better in utilizing
space
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 than in
condominium
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a condominium
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.
Though they
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 both have pros and cons, described in the following paragraphs.
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 with, it is undeniable that nowadays humans prefer living near their job even though they need to live in
such
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 a smaller room than they used to
lived
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 in their home.
Following
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this
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, living in high-rise
condominiums
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are
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is
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 a good choice because of some advantages
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 as convenient commute, the vertical
space
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is
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being
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 utilized efficiently in the limited vertical area, and most
of
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apply
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condominiums
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the condominiums
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 offer free facilities like a swimming pool and a fitness
center
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centre
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.
In
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contrary
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the contrary
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, living in
this
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 type of accommodation
also
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cause
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causes
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 some disadvantages because of the cluster of
people
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 packed in
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one building, increasing the stress. To illustrate,
people
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 who live in
condominiums
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 with other members will have
a
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limited personal
space
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 and sometimes need to share the
space
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 with others,
can
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which can
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 cause
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stress and low personal
space
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.
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While living
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Living
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 in
the
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a
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house
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 on
land
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 may tackle
this
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 problem. On the one hand, living in a
house
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 property on
land
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 can bring more benefits
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 as the
houses
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will have
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having
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 more
space
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 for each
members
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member
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of
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in
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of
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 the family, the
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house offers
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offering
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 more green
space
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, allowing
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cultivation
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cultivate
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 some trees or flowers, lower
people
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 in the horizontal area making not packed population which leading to
peaceful
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the peaceful
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 feeling.
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,
people
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 who plan to
adopting
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adopt
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the a
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a
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 pet or
having
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have
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 a kid would prefer choosing
living
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live
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 in
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house
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a house
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 because there are more spaces for growing and fostering
an
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incremental family members.
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,
houses
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also
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 have a drawback,
comparing
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compared
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 with the same
space
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 of condominium, the under-middle class person cannot
affords
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 the prices of both
land
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 and the
house
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.
To conclude
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, Living in many
houses
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 on
land
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 would bring more positive influences, not only the way of efficiently
manage
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managing
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 the utilizing
space
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 in horizontal areas but
also
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 less cluster of the habitants. At the same time,
land
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 and
houses
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 would be more expensive than flats or
condominiums
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 which may not
affordable
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be affordable
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 for poverty or lower-class citizens.

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coherence cohesion
Try to develop a more logical structure in your essay. Ensure each paragraph flows smoothly into the next and connects clearly to your main argument.
task achievement
Work on organizing and developing your ideas more clearly. Make sure your arguments are easy to follow and that each paragraph focuses on a single main point.
task achievement
Your essay provides a complete response to the prompt and addresses both views as required.
coherence cohesion
You have included an introduction and a conclusion, which helps frame your essay well.
task achievement
Your essay includes some relevant specific examples to illustrate your points.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban sprawl
  • geographical area
  • densely populated
  • infrastructural
  • maintenance costs
  • energy-efficient
  • green technologies
  • carbon footprint
  • community and lifestyle
  • social cohesion
  • environmental considerations
  • biodiversity
  • heat island effect
  • flexibility
  • scalability
  • preservation
  • distinct communities
  • demographic changes
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