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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates Japan’s population across three
age
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 groups, namely 0-14, 25-64 and 65+, from 1960 to 2040, with figures measured in millions.
Overall
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, the
proportion
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 of
people
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 aged 25-64 remained the largest over the period, despite a gradual decline after peaking in 1970.
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, the 0-14
age
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 group experienced a downward trend,
while
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 the
proportion
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 of elderly
people
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 aged 65+ rose steadily. Looking first at two younger
age
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 groups, the population aged 0-14 stood at 30 in 1960 and increased slowly to a peak of just 34 in 1970. It
then
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 declined consistently, reaching about 26 in 1980 and around 18 in 2000.
This
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 downward trend is expected to continue, with the figure
fall
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 significantly to 12 in 2020 and approximately 7 in 2024. Meanwhile, the
proportion
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 of
people
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 aged 25-64 remained considerably the
lagest
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largest
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 throughout the period. Its population rose slightly from 64 in 1960 to a peak of 68 in 1970, after fluctuating slowly around 60 until 2000.
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, it
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then
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declined substantially between 62 in 2010 and 52 in 2030, before recovering slightly to approximately 54 in 2040. Regarding the oldest
age
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 group, the
proportion
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 aged 65+ followed the opposite pattern. Starting at only 4 in 1960,
after
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the figure climbed moderately from about 9 in 1990 to 18 in 2010.
This
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 growth is projected to continue throughout the period, with the number of elderly
people
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rose
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 considerably to
nearby
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nearly
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 23 in 2020, just 26 in 2030 and 30 in 2040.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, proportion, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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