The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.
The
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illustrates
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of
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older than 65 years old in 3 countries, America, Switzerland, and Japan during a period of 100 years.
Overall
, As is shown by the graph The rate of elderly people in Japan has grown the fastest over the years,
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those in the USA and Sweden have
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significantly.
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elderly population in the US from 1940 to 1980
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up rapidly from 9% to 15%,
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slowly to 14% in 2020 and continued to increase to 23% in 2040.
Besides
, The proportion of older people in Sweden from 1940 to 1980
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from 7% to 14% and
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rise in 2040 to 25%.
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, The elderly in Japan from 1940 to 1980
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from 5% to 3%
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growth substantial to 26% in 2040.
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