Many people go to university for acadamic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualifed workers such as electricians and plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Almost most people go to university for academic study to have high-paying jobs ,

such

as

doctor

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. more students should be encouraged to do practical teaching

due to

lack

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the lack

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of

qualifed

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qualified

workers

for

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, for

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instance ,

electricians

and

plumbers

. I agree with

this

issue because of two reasons that I will explain.

To begin

with ,

it is clear that

vocational training is essential for society

especially

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, especially

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for

treathment

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treatment

centers

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centres

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.

Although

doctors and nurses are the corns of

hospital

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the hospital

a hospital

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,

function

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the function

a function

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of tools is important too.

for

example

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example,

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if one of

tools

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the tools

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get

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gets

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destroy

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destroyed

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or weak ,

treathment

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treatment

prosses

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processes

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will

get

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be

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stop

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stopped

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.To illustrate , some patients can

breath

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only with

oxygen

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an oxygen

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system.

Hence

, the

existance

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existence

of

electricians

for them is

nessesary

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necessary

.

On the other hand

, All of us need

to

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apply

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plumbers

for our house to

having

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have

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facilities ,

such

as water , bathroom toilet and kitchen . On the ground

that

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apply

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without plumbs and

plumbers

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plumbers,

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it is not possible. To explain more , when an

engeenier

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engineer

wants to build an apartment , First of

all

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all,

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he needs

to

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apply

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a plumber

for establishing

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to establish

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plumbs and operate the system.

Thus

,

plumbers

are the main role in building.

To sum up

, practical jobs ,

such

as

electricians

and

plumbers

are two main jobs that are useful

in

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apply

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every where

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everywhere

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for instance

, in homes and in hospitals. As you know hospitals have numerous people and these crowded places need more

electricians

and

plumbers

rather than other places.