The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restarts between 2013

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restarts between 2013
The graph below shows the
frequency
of citizens in America having fast food as
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in 2003, 2006 and 2013, and it is obvious these three years
shows
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a similar pattern in the variation trend.
Firstly
, the number of people
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fast food ‘every day’ and
they
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‘never’ ate them accounted
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compared to other
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, and both
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constituted the highest portion in 2003 within ‘every day’ and ‘never’, with around 4% and 5%, respectively.
In contrast
,
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in 2006 and 2013 seemed equal,
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up
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for
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about 2.5% and 4%.
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two
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symbolized people barely have fast food daily or never.
Secondly
, the median of the total is ‘several times a week’ and
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few
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a
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, and the former showed the highest portion in 2006, with 20% of the total, and they were
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lower in 2003 and 2013, accounted around 17% and 16%, respectively.
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, the latter one —a few times a year showed approximately 13% in 2003,
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and 15
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% in both 2005 and 2013. Which might present
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frequency
are American
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second choices.
Finally
, the highest
two
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constituted
by
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‘once a week’ and ‘2013’, and both of them showed
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in
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2003,
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31% and 30%, respectively. It is worth noting that
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these two frequencies
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two
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showed totally different variation
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in the
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2006 and 2013, once or twice a month with about 8% lower than once a week in 2006, but in 2013, the latter showed 5% higher than the former. Indicating these
two
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are the most popular in the US.
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