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The map shows the plan for a new factory complex and housing area for employees

The map shows the plan for a new factory complex and housing area for employees
#plan #factory #area #employees
The given
map
 illustrates the future plan for a new factory complex and residence fares for employees. It is divided
five
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into five
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 main segments into industrial
areas
, housing
areas
 and gymnastic
areas
.
As it
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It
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 can be seen
that
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apply
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the
center
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centre
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area
 would be situated main industrial
areas
 which
was
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were
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 surrounded by a roundabout, and
also
 would
locate
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in
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at
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 a crossroad from east to west, and from north to south.
This
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This area
These areas
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areas
 can be only entered via
east
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the east
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 road.
In addition
, another industrial
areas
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area
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 is based on the southeastern corner of the
map
where
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which
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 is far from residences mainly because of
isolation
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the isolation
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 of
noice
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noise
 it might generate. An office and a meeting room would
situate
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 at the northwest and the southeast, respectively. They seem to be bevel symmetry. Moving to housing
areas
,
it is clear that
 the biggest scale of residential place would be arranged at the northwestern corner of
this
 region,
the
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and the
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 second big scale
of
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apply
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housing
area
 would be located at the
west most
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westmost
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 of the
map
 which is just adjacent
with
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to
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 the main west-east road, with a parking around the housing
areas
 where people could walk around, indicating factory designed a relaxed working atmosphere to employees. The
last
 minimum housing
area
 would be arranged at the northeastern of the
map
 with a swimming pool aside, which means people could take
apart
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part
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 in some regular physical exercise there.
To sum up
,
this
 factory would be designed
to
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into
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 different parts to provide
working
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a working
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 place and living
area
seperately
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separately
, which would apply
work-life
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a work-life
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 balance atmosphere to employees.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, areas, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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