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THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE PERCENTAGE OF ADULTS OF DIFFERENT AGES IN THE UK WHO USED THE INTERNET EVERY DAY FROM 2003-2006. SUMMARISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES, AND MAKE COMPARIONS WHERE RELEVANT.

THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE PERCENTAGE OF ADULTS OF DIFFERENT AGES IN THE UK WHO USED THE INTERNET EVERY DAY FROM 2003-2006. SUMMARISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES, AND MAKE COMPARIONS WHERE RELEVANT.
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The given bar chart illustrates the amount age
groups
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using
 the
Internet
 each day between 2003 and 2006. The units are measured in percentage.
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, it can be seen that every
groups
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group
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 had the highest
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research
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 in 2006 except
group
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groups
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 16-24.
Additionally
, from 25 to
64
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 there is
big
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 difference
in
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 2006 and 2003. The others show
the
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 medium number. Looking at the figures in
further
 detail, in 2006 all age
groups
 reached the highest top apart from the group of 16-24. The 25-44 and 45-54 had the same number at 80%, 55-64 had 50% and 65+ had 20%
while
 16-24 had 88%.
By contrast
, in 2003 three
groups
 from 25-64 had the lowest amount with 50%< 60% and 30% respectively. Turning to the remaining data, the 16-24 most used the
Internet
 in 2005 with 100%, during 2003 and 2004 were the lowest years with the same amount at 80%.
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 that in 25-44 and 45-
54
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54,
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 the users spend on the
Internet
 in 2000 and 2005 quite high with 60% and 65% in 25-44, 70% and 75% in 45-54. The 55-64
interracted
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interacted
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 with
Internet
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the Internet
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 a similar number in 2004 and 2005 at 30%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words groups, internet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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