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The maps show a present layout an office building and plans for its future

The maps show a present layout an office building and plans for its future
The given diagram shows 2 floorplans, providing information
to
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on
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 the changes that have taken place
an
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in an
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office
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 building in the present day and how it looks like redevelopment. The
results
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result
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 of these developments is that grasses have been transformed into new
building
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buildings
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.
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Entrance
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The entrance
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 and
office
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was
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 changed the place.
Additionally
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,
kitchen
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the kitchen
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 and canteen
has
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have
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 been transformed into
new
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the new
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 building
while
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storeroom
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the storeroom
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 and other
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entrance
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entrances
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 stayed the same. Beginning with the left side,
grass
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the grass
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area
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 was replaced with the new outdoor seating
area
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. Two offices in the bottom of the west
area
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 were
knocked-down
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knocked down
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 and
built
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a bigger
office
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.
In
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 the top of the left side,
kitchen
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the kitchen
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 and canteen were replaced with new offices. There is a new
entrance
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 in the half of the
office
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.
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Entrance
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was remained
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remained
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 the same. Moving onto the right side of the building,
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entrance
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the entrance
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another
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apply
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was replaced with
others
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other offices
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office
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.
Others
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Other
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 grass was replaced with the new meeting
area
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 and coffee machine at the top. WCs of the
office
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 building
was
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were
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 flattened and relocated to the
east north
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east-north
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 of the building, next to the coffee machine.
Storeroom
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The storeroom
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was staying
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stayed
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 the same.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words office, entrance, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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