Some People prefer to spend their lives doing the same thing and avoiding changes. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion
In
this
modern era, most of
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apply
people
choose way
of Add an article
the way
a way
their
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apply
life
in comfortable
zone, they prefer to spend Add an article
a comfortable
theirs
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their
lives
doing same
things every Correct article usage
the same
day
even forever, they
tend Correct word choice
and they
avoiding
changes Change the verb form
to avoid
on
their Change preposition
in
lives
. Only several people
who has
a big mental to try something new or out Change the verb form
have
from
their convenient zone to feel changes Change preposition
of
on
their Change preposition
in
lives
. I would like to discuss about
Remove the preposition
apply
this
a couple
things Add the preposition
couple of
acording
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according
many
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to many
opinion
from me and Change to a plural noun
opinions
anothers
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other
people
.
Do
Wrong verb form
Doing
same
thing every Change the article
the same
day
that can resulting
a Change the verb form
result
be resulting
salary
is no problem. Most of
Change preposition
apply
people
feel convenient doing their work every day
even every years
as long their job Change to a singular noun
year
able
to Add a missing verb
is able
be became
a Change the verb form
become
salary
for them. They tend to avoid some risk
Fix the agreement mistake
risks
on
their Change preposition
in
lives
because which
taking a new step they Correct word choice
when
Add a missing verb
are concern
concern
Replace the word
concerned
to lost
their old occupation, Change preposition
about losing
therefore
this
situation can lead their life
to danger condition. For Instance
, if they leaving
their job and Wrong verb form
leave
make
some business in order to enhance Verb problem
do
living
standard, but in Correct pronoun usage
their living
the
fact their business is not Correct article usage
apply
developt
, Replace the word
developed
this
case can make their household is
broke and Unnecessary verb
apply
this
is the
big concern Correct article usage
a
of
most Change preposition
for
people
.
On the other hand
, a lot of people
think that cange
is always a good Correct your spelling
change
things
Change the noun form
thing
,
because Remove the comma
apply
their
have Replace the word
there
a
many Correct article usage
apply
oppurtunity
to enhance their living Correct your spelling
opportunity
standard
. Fix the agreement mistake
standards
For example
, many people
feel unsatisfied for
their Change preposition
with
salary
which flat income every month, therefore
they taking
a different way to Wrong verb form
take
increas
their Correct your spelling
increase
salary
. People's
like Unnecessary verb
People
this
tend
have a big mentality to force their Add the particle
tend to
life
, they unaffraid
to Correct your spelling
unafraid
taking
some Wrong verb form
take
risk
in order to repair the standard of living. Fix the agreement mistake
risks
As a result
, they will make something which able to
enhance their income Fix the infinitive
apply
such
as business, move to other
company, and anything else. If Correct quantifier usage
another
this
way to be succes
, Correct your spelling
success
so
they can Correct word choice
apply
enjoying
the result Change the verb form
enjoy
be enjoying
from
their effort before it and Change preposition
of
able
to lead their living Add a missing verb
be able
standart
Correct your spelling
standard
standards
in
higher step than Change preposition
apply
they
who Correct pronoun usage
those
never
Add a missing verb
are never
affraid
to leave their comfort zone.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
afraid
do
something new able to lead Wrong verb form
doing
the
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apply
people
's standart
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standard
living
to Change preposition
of living
higher
step but Correct article usage
a higher
have
many Correct subject-verb agreement
has
risk
. And Change to a plural noun
risks
do
Wrong verb form
doing
same
thing every Change the article
the same
day
more
convenient and Add a missing verb
is more
avoded
from many Correct your spelling
avoided
risk
but Fix the agreement mistake
risks
dificult
to change Correct your spelling
difficult
people
's lives
. It is depend
on the Change the verb form
depends
people
, is there
prefer to change Correct pronoun usage
they
standar
living with many Correct your spelling
standard
risk
or keep stay in Change to a plural noun
risks
convenient
Correct article usage
a convenient
life
without life
canged.Submitted by patricius.yohanes on
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