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the table shows the percentage of goverment speding on education and trainning over course of 18-24 years old in 5 countries in 2012

the table shows the percentage of goverment speding on education and trainning over course of 18-24 years old in 5 countries in 2012
Contained in the table is the proportion of national regulators investing
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 education and
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training
trainning
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training
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course
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 of 18-24 years old in five nations in 2012
Overall
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, it can be seen that the percentage of spending in Slovenia was the highest in expenditure.
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, that of
Poland
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 bottomed of expenditure. In
term
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 of expenditure rate,
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Slovenia peaked at 25%, followed by
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Hungary got a second
speding
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spending
speeding
, boasting 13% and three
others
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 countries had 10%, 9% and 5%
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Romania,
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Czech
 Republic and
Poland
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 respectively.
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, the proportion of spending in Romania double that of
Poland
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 with 10% and 5%. Moving to the participation rate, at that time
Poland
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 reached a peak of
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participation
with
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 44%.
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,
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Slovenia was overcome by
Poland
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 at 40%
while
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 the data
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Czech
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 Republic is higher than Romania
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%,
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27% and 23% respectively.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore
 one of
three
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 countries getting
highest
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the highest
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 point is the percentage of spending in Hungary with 34%

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words poland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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