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The graph below shows the total revenue of three pizza places in Vietnam. The figures were taken in 2017.

The graph below shows the total revenue of three pizza places in Vietnam. The figures were taken in 2017.
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The given line graph depicts information about the gross
revenue
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 of three separate chains of
pizza
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 restaurants in VietNam throughout 2017.
Overall
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, the total
revenue
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 of Domino
Pizza
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 and the
Pizza
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 Company increased rapidly
whereas
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Pizza
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 Hut fluctuated and ended up in
lower
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a lower
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 share.
Pizza
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 Hut had the lowest
overall
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revenue
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 in 2017. Its income started at roughly 15
million
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dollars
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 in January and
this
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 statistic remained stable in June,
similarly
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. And yet, from June onwards, its
revenue
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 plateaued and
finally
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 reached just under 5
million
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dollars
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 in December. In the same period, Domino
Pizza
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 and the
Pizza
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 Company started with positive data,
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and theỉr
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theỉr
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their
revenue
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 both went up to approximately more than 30
million
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dollars
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 in January. Their
revenue
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 rose steadily throughout the year, with Domino
Pizza
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 reaching a high of 35
million
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dollars
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 in December and the
Pizza
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 Company reaching a high of more than 40
million
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dollars
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 in July.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words revenue, pizza, million, dollars with synonyms.
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