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The table gives information about the water use in three sectors in six countries.

The table gives information about the water use in three sectors in six countries.
The given table illustrates the differences between six
countries
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 of
water
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 usage from different sectors named domestic,
agriculture
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 and industrial.
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,
agriculture
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 is the most
water
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-intensive area
from
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 all six
countries
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, whilst residential purposes require the lowest
amount
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 of
water
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. Looking at
agriculture
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water
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-consumed, Russia is on top of the chart, using as much as 1863 cubic
meters
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 of
water
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 for farming activities.
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 is followed by Turkey and
Canada
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, with
respective
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amount
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amounts
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 being 1482 and 1238 cubic
meters
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. The
amount
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 of
water
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 used for
agriculture
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 in the other three
countries
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are
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 comparable, ranging from 741 to 610 cubic
meters
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. Moving to the
water
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 used for households, with 341 cubic
meters
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Australia
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Australian
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 homes need more
water
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 than those in any other
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countries
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country
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. The second biggest consumer in
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 regard is
Canada
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, with 279 cubic
meters
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. Chinese residents require the least, at less than one-tenth the
amount
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 reported for
Canada
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. In
term
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 of
water
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 used for industrial purposes,
Canada
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 consumes the most
water
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I
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in
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this
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 sector,
wit
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with
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 832 cubic
meters
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, about 100 cubic
meters
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 higher than the figure for Turkey, and more than double that for the UK. Industry in Russia is not as dynamic, as
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 country only
use
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 56 cubic
meters
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 of
water
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 for
this
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 area.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, water, agriculture, amount, meters, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption patterns
  • agricultural sector
  • industrial water use
  • domestic water consumption
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • disparities
  • efficiency
  • sustainability
  • government policies
  • managing
  • regulating
  • regions
  • factors influencing
  • comparative analysis
  • water resources
  • resource management
  • sector-specific use
  • data comparison
  • water scarcity
  • usage trends
  • conservation efforts
  • allocation of resources
  • water footprint
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