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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years.
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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of
energy
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production
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 in France in two years. The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of various sources of
energy
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 which were produced in France between 1995 and 2005.
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, it can be observed that most of the
energy
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production
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 had an increase with the exception of petrol. It can
also
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 be noted that coal saw the highest trend in the timeframe, becoming the main
energy
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 which people in France used most throughout the 10-year period. Regarding two sources of
energy
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 which total occupied more than half of the pie charts in the period. About coal, it increased slightly from 29.80% to 30.93% between 1995 and 2005. Meanwhile, gas
production
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 rose gradually over time, reaching nearly 30% in the second year. Taking a look at the other
energy
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 productions, nuclear and other increased nearly 5% from 64% to 10,1% and 4,9% to 9,1%, respectively.
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, in comparison with the others, petrol was the only
energy
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production
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 which saw a decrease,
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 it dropped significantly, reaching approximately 20%
at the end
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 of the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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