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The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar chart illustrates information pertaining to the teaching
hours
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 of
teachers
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 every year in four different nations during 2001.
Overall
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, it can be seen that upper and lower-secondary
teachers
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 did more
hours
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 of teaching than primary
ones
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 in every country.
Additionally
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, it is apparent that the highest number of teaching
hours
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 was for upper secondary
teachers
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,
whereas
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 the opposite was true for primary
ones
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 in all nations. Looking at the statistics for the USA in
further
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 detail, where upper secondary
teachers
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 took the dominance of nearly 1200
hours
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,
while
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 lower secondary and primary
teachers
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 only accounted for exactly 1000 and approximately 750
hours
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, respectively.
Similarly
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, upper secondary
teachers
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 in Iceland outnumbered primary and lower secondary
ones
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 at more than 900 compared to roughly 600
hours
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. Turning to the remaining nations, where less substantial disparities were recorded. Specifically, Spain had its number of upper secondary
teachers
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’ teaching
hours
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 added up to exactly 900
hours
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, which was higher than around 750
hours
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 for lower secondary and under 700
hours
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 for primary
ones
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. The number of teaching
hours
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 each year of upper secondary
teachers
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 in Japan, was
similarly
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, recorded at exactly 750
hours
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,
while
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 other categories were just nearly 650
hours
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 or less.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "similarly, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, teachers, ones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual hours of teaching
  • teaching workload
  • educational systems
  • teacher-student ratio
  • significantly
  • slightly
  • noticeably
  • gap
  • highest/lowest number of hours
  • compare
  • contrast
  • reflect
  • variations
  • distribution of teaching hours
  • average
  • respectively
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