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The pie charts and table present information on percentage of imported sea food to the UK from three nations and total value of sea food.

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The pie charts compare the proportion of
seafood
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 imported to the UK from three different nations
while
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 the table illustrates the total worth of the
seafood
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.
Overall
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,
Sweden
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 and
Germany
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experience
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 upward trends
whereas
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Poland
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 witnessed a downward trend.
Additionally
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, the worth of imported
seafood
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 increases in number. Looking at the pies in
further
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 detail,
Germany
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,
Sweden
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 and
Poland
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 stood at 7%, 28% and 65% respectively in 1987. In the next ten years,
Germany
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 shot up by 18%,
Sweden
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 rose significantly to 40% and
Poland
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 dropped to 35% in 1997.
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, in 2007,
Germany
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 increased to 27%
while
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Sweden
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 climbed to 43%.
In contrast
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,
Poland
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 saw a continuous decrease to 30%. Turning to the table, the figure
of
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for
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 the total value of imported
seafood
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 started at 7.40 million dollars. In the next ten years, the total value rocketed up to 9.10 million dollars. In 2007, the total value rapidly jumped to 12.30 million dollars, almost double that of 1987.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words seafood, sweden, germany, poland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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