Some people are of the opinion that there should be a cae-free day once every month, on which no private vehicles are allowed on the road. Discuss the advantages and possible disadvantages.
In
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At
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this
present,air pollution is becoming Correct determiner usage
apply
the
major issue Correct article usage
a
of
the world.Many people argue that there should be Change preposition
in
car-free
day once Correct article usage
a car-free
in
a month ,when only public Change preposition
apply
transport
should be allowed on the roads.There Use synonyms
are
Change the verb form
is
number
of advantages that favour Change the article
a number
the number
this
statement but Linking Words
also
have some disadvantages .Linking Words
This
essay will discuss both.
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Firstly
,with the advancement of Linking Words
technology
more individuals prefer to own Add a comma
technology,
there
own cars.Replace the word
their
Moreover
, increasing competition between car companies,and Linking Words
Correct article usage
the developing
developing
Replace the word
development
more
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of more
budget friendly
schemes ,Add a hyphen
budget-friendly
such
as trends of leasing a car or easy payment Linking Words
installments
Change the spelling
instalments
attracting
people to buy private vehicles,which leads to more loads on roads and Wrong verb form
attract
causing
congestion .Wrong verb form
causes
Furthermore
,carbon emissions from increased traffic is a hazard.Linking Words
This
can be controlled by making strict rules ,Linking Words
such
as a Linking Words
carbon free
day once every month,it Add a hyphen
carbon-free
promote
public Change the verb form
promotes
transport
and Use synonyms
create
equity between different groups of society .
Change the verb form
creates
On the other hand
,communities are used to private Linking Words
convance
and they are comfortable Correct your spelling
convince
conveyance
connivance
to travel
by their own cars.If government make it Change the verb form
travelling
compulseryfor
everyone to travel by public Correct your spelling
compulsory for
transport
,it will Use synonyms
over burden
the buses or trains and regular commuters will face more difficulties.Correct your spelling
overburden
Secondly
,in case of any emergency, where it is not possible to access local Linking Words
transport
,Use synonyms
for example
,if Linking Words
some one
has Correct your spelling
someone
Correct article usage
a cardic
cardic
arrest ,and authorities not allow to use any private vehicle for a specific day ,it would be detrimental.
Correct your spelling
cardiac
To conclude
,Linking Words
eventhough
making Correct your spelling
even though
such
policies Linking Words
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
benificial
for the nation,there will be some relaxation Correct your spelling
beneficial
for
emergency situations.So, Change preposition
in
such
rules are more Linking Words
environmental
friendly and have more positive effects on society Change the adjective
environmentally
as well as
human Linking Words
habitate
.Correct your spelling
habitat
habitation
habitats
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coherence and cohesion
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task achievement
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other
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task achievement
Make sure to fully develop and elaborate on the points mentioned. Some arguments are introduced but not sufficiently explained.
task achievement
You have addressed both advantages and disadvantages, which shows a balanced approach to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are present and fulfill their basic functions.
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